jaidyn.b
4/2/2015 12:33:18 am
Did you know having a child drink chocolate milk actually improves the overall quality of a child’s diet? I think that chocolate milk should be severed in schools, and I think this because chocolate milk has a great flavor, chocolate milk has the same nutrients as white milk, and chocolate milk has very little added sugar.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:28:37 pm
Solid start, Jaidyn. Consider adding even more research to make your essay even stronger. Counterclaims can help make your reader think of your research a little differently.
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Alex W
4/14/2015 12:34:05 am
Yes i agree that chocolate milk only has a little added sugar but, it is only little if you drink chocolate milk once a week. Kids mostly drink chocolate milk every school day and chocolate milk has 18g of sugar and if you do the math "18x5=90 kids drink about 90g of sugar every week and that is bad" says a scientist
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Ashley A
4/10/2017 08:53:38 am
um compared to other things 90 grams of sugar isn't that bad my teacher drinks coke a cola almost everyday
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11/7/2017 08:24:36 am
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1/13/2020 10:16:32 am
I love this story because my kids are writing and essay on it
aidan.a
4/14/2015 12:35:28 am
dear jaidyn yes chocolate milk is a small bit healthy but it leads to diseases and it has3 1/2 teaspoons of added sugar plus it isn't exactly "jammed packed" with vitamins yes it has vitamins but not to many
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brooklin smith
1/20/2021 11:22:23 am
i think so to and i go to dunkerton school in iowa
aidan.a
4/14/2015 12:40:23 am
nice job though
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Deveshi
4/14/2015 12:40:45 am
Jaidyn, I noticed that you think chocolate milk drinkers are healthier than non-milk drinkers. However 1/3 of children in America are obese.
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Aiden P
4/14/2015 12:41:37 am
Hi Jaidyn! I thought you had a pretty good essay, but I saw that you thought that chocolate milk improves a kids diet. I disagree with this. If kids start getting used to chocolate milk's sweet taste, then they may only want to have more sugary and unhealthy foods, actually decreasing the nutrition in a child's diet.
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Brooke
4/14/2015 12:47:40 am
i understand why chocolate milk has the same nutrients as white milk, however, some people think that chocolate milk has too much added sugar and it has little nutrients
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Enilya
2/2/2017 11:22:28 am
Yea I agree
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3/9/2017 07:44:50 pm
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Jacob S.
4/14/2015 02:40:21 am
Jaidyn, I've noticed that you said that chocolate milk has little added sugar. You don't understand, Chocolate milk has a lot of added sugar. In fact, according to one of my articles, "Sugary Drinks", chocolate milk has up to 30 g. of sugar. And also I saw a video that said that 30 g. of sugar can fill an entire bus.
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Judi
2/19/2017 03:34:55 am
No offence but its imposible that only 30 grams of sugar can fill a bus
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2/15/2017 09:07:44 am
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3/14/2017 09:47:45 am
no way rilly
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4/4/2017 09:04:52 am
i need to do an argumentative essay on chocolate milk and i need more supporting facts that it should be served in schools.XD
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4/24/2017 01:34:56 pm
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5/8/2017 07:44:14 am
Hmm. But chocolate milk should not be served in schools:
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Unkown
1/10/2022 08:56:57 am
nope. choclate milk SHOULD be served in schools
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keshawn
2/18/2018 03:32:48 pm
I don't agree
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Did you know having a child drink chocolate milk actually improves the overall quality of a child’s diet? I think that chocolate milk should be severed in schools, and I think this because chocolate milk has a great flavor, chocolate milk has the same nutrients as white milk, and chocolate milk has very little added sugar.
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Mrs.Mac
4/12/2018 11:42:14 am
suck it
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Truth
11/11/2019 07:59:18 am
The real question is what essential nutrients would be compromised if kids don't drink any milk ???
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diya
1/7/2020 11:11:57 am
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omg im doing a essay and my teacher commeted on this and im so happy to see that but any way choclate milk should be in school all kids love it and they drink it more omg I hope I do good on this essay idk im doing my homework good luck to me and my class mates.
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2/12/2020 03:44:20 pm
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1/7/2021 07:59:33 am
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Katheryn
9/9/2021 04:01:16 pm
I really admire your work you have done and it sounds like you used a lot of thought into it. I too love chocolate milk and I hope it dosen't get band soon.
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PIKACHUDX253
11/16/2021 11:24:05 am
i agree
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Mara
4/2/2015 12:38:02 am
The Great Chocolate Milk Debate
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:30:37 pm
Great start, Mara! I would consider rereading your evidence to make sure you have sourced everything properly and you given credit to the experts. Remember, quotes make your essay even stronger!
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Jade H.
4/14/2015 12:38:44 am
I realize that you think chocolate milk is healthier than white milk but, all the sugar in chocolate milk could overflow an entire school bus. This means that chocolate milk is loaded with sugar
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Mcmircmmccdrvmim
3/15/2017 04:47:08 pm
So?
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Mohima A.
4/14/2015 12:41:16 am
While chocolate milk has some nutrients like Vitamin A, D, and E, it also has calcium and up to 30 grams of sugar! That's too mch sugar! The calcium in bilk isn't beneficial to the body much or at all. Plus, chocolate milk's seventy extra calories than the amount in white milk outnumbers the amount of nutrients it offers. This proves that chocolate milk's nutrients are overthrown by it's unhealthy additives.
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Lindsay
4/14/2015 12:46:34 am
Chocolate milk has some nutrients, but chocolate milk is loaded with sugar. It has up to 30 grams of sugar.
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sophia s
4/14/2015 02:37:23 am
you may think chocolate milk is good for u but when u look at the facts it contains 20 or 30 grams of sugar in al
Sydney
2/2/2016 08:41:54 am
And tasty too!
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3/15/2017 04:46:33 pm
I agree with you. The reason I am reading all thes comments is because I need it for my school
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Madisyn H.
4/2/2015 12:40:00 am
Have you ever dreamed of chocolate milk being banned from schools? Well, your dream has come true, chocolate milk is sadly getting banned from schools. I think chocolate milk should be allowed in schools, because chocolate compared to sport drinks and sodas has less sugar kids might drink more milk when it is flavored, people don’t get the idea around milk, milk is milk and chocolate compared to sport drinks and sodas has less sugar.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:32:54 pm
This is loaded with information and is organized in a way that is very easy to read. Consider looking for opportunities to really explain EXACTLY what you mean. Sometimes evidence can be bolstered multiply times to really make it clear to the reader.
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Libby E.
4/2/2015 12:43:57 am
Libby Evans #7
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:34:46 pm
Amazing work, Libby! Your essay is jammed with information! Consider revising by explaining why your reasons are important. For example, it is important because kids like the taste of chocolate milk because otherwise they might drink...
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bob
12/16/2015 12:49:56 pm
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maddy
4/14/2015 12:49:06 am
you might think that kids drink chocolate milk when flavored. but you are wrong because it has up to 30 grams of surgar. also when the kids get to munch surgar it can lead to health pronblems sunch as cancer this proves that cahocolate milk should not be allowed in schools.
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Hayden B.
4/2/2015 12:44:44 am
I think that chocolate milk should be served in schools. Chocolate milk is so good that if there was no chocolate milk I don’t think that I would even drink milk!
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:35:30 pm
Solid start to your essay! Adding more research will really make your essay even more convincing.
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Dawson
4/14/2015 12:34:53 am
Hayden, I disagree because you think that choclate milk has 9 essinatial nutrients but, white milk has all of the 9 nutrients without all of the added sugar. And, to much sugar can lead to diabites, obecity and, lots of other health problems. And, choclate milk has up to thirty grams of sugar, so all the healthy nutrients are overthrown by all the sugars!
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aidan.a
4/14/2015 12:45:18 am
well all that is mostly true but white milk is healthier than chocolate milk but over all nice job
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aidan.a
4/14/2015 12:47:17 am
hayden sorry I left that out
Jordan
4/14/2015 12:47:16 am
Hayden, I disagree with you that chocolate milk is better then chocolate because white only contains 12 grams when chocolate milk contains up to 30
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Dont drink chocolate milk
jessica j
4/2/2015 01:44:38 am
Chocolate milk
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:36:29 pm
You have a great organization to your essay. Consider bolstering your evidence by explaining what it really means to your reader.
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Alex W
4/14/2015 12:40:06 am
Yes chocolate milk can be healthy for you in some ways but the sugar though! Most people think that since chocolate milk only has 18g of sugar it is not a lot but think about it, kids drink chocolate milk every school day and you do the math 18x5=90 kids drink about 90g of sugar every day and it could hurt the kids who aren't as active as others and that sugar could turn into proses fat.
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Caresse
11/29/2016 09:08:48 pm
yes I do agree with you however, they shouldn't serve it everyday and also, Alex does have a point because that is to much sugar if they have it everyday but Alex, but they are at least getting their nutrients
Alexandria Hall
4/14/2015 01:42:52 am
jessica you might think that choclate milk is good for you however choclate milk has some thing called lactose wich is two sugars mixed together.
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Jessie B.
4/2/2015 01:46:11 am
Imagine coming home from school and having fresh baked, warm cookies waiting to be eaten on the counter. Why can’t we have that at schools but with chocolate milk? We all deserve treats every once in a while like cookies, brownies, chocolate milk and much more! I think chocolate milk should be allowed in schools because students drink more milk when it’s flavored, it doesn’t have much sugar and chocolate milk is healthy.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:37:44 pm
Great start! By adding even more research your reader will be even more convinced. You know so much more about chocolate milk than what is in this essay!
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Maiya E.
4/14/2015 01:45:50 am
While it is true that chocolate milk has the same nine nutrients that white milk has, chocolate milk has lots of added sugar along with calories and other unneeded additional things. Chocolate milk has 170 calories and 28 grams of sugar, and sometimes even more. Though they are making a healthier version with 140 calories and 22 grams of sugar, that's still a lot of extra sugar. Not only that but kids still highly prefer the older, unhealthy one. So overall; it is true that chocolate milk has lots of nutrients, I cannot deny, but it contains more sugar and calories to even the balance to true improvement on health.
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Kali S.
4/2/2015 01:48:35 am
Imagine coming home to the smell of fresh baked chocolate chip cookies, that’s a treat just like chocolate milk. I think chocolate milk should be served in schools because it’s healthy for you, kids will chose it over regular milk, and it’s better for you than other beverages.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:38:56 pm
Your work is very organized and easy to follow. By adding more research in your essay it will be more convincing. You are missing some SHOCKING information for your reader.
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Maiya E.
4/14/2015 01:49:20 am
While it is true that chocolate milk is delicious like chocolate chip cookies; you are comparing chocolate milk to something as unhealthy as cookies. Basically you're criticizing your own opinion by saying chocolate milk is as unhealthy as cookies.
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Ethan W
4/2/2015 01:49:20 am
Imagine walking into a cafeteria and all there was to drink was chocolate milk. That would be awesome because I think that chocolate milk should be served in schools. One reason why I think this is because chocolate milk is healthy for you, also because chocolate milk encourages kids to drink more milk and get the dairy you need. The last thing why I think this is because it is a good alternative to other drinks. Read on to find out more things why chocolate milk should be served in schools.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:40:16 pm
Solid start to your essay, but you know so much more about this topic that is in this essay. Make sure you are looking for lots of powerful evidence that supports your reasons. Jam it full with information!
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Zachary W.
4/14/2015 12:32:43 am
Ethan, I noticed that you think chocolate milk is healthy for you. Critics argue that chocolate milk has many nutrients, such as calcium and a few vitamins. While it might be true that is has many nutrients, still all in all chocolate milk has lots of cholesterol and saturated fat and high levels of both can lead to problems both in the short term and the long term, such as heart disease and cancer. This means that the vitamins in chocolate milk are pretty much pointless.
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Zachary W.
4/14/2015 12:34:42 am
Sorry, I meant the nutrients in chocolate milk are pretty much pointless
Angelina L.
4/14/2015 01:49:14 am
Ethan, I agree that choclate milk is delicious, is it really all that healthy for you? Its easy to think that yet chocolate is delicious chocolate milk can easily be abused in childrens diets and can lead to obesity, as many kids are already overweight.
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Makayah K
4/14/2015 01:50:11 am
Ethan some people like you, think chocolate milk is healthy, however when you look at the facts you realize it is high in cholesterol and saturated fat. Too much of those can lead to being over weight and having diabetes. Now for the little vitamins that are in it is it really worth taking that risk
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JJ
4/14/2015 09:16:25 am
i like the start to your essay and the end but all in all i think your story was great good job
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Vincent G.
4/2/2015 01:49:26 am
Chocolate milk should be served in schools because it is very nutritious, kids like it, and kids drink more milk when it is flavored. Could you imagine walking into your school cafeteria and there is no chocolate milk. Read on to find out the other benefits of keeping chocolate milk in schools.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:41:23 pm
Solid work! You really bolstered the information well! Consider adding in counterclaims to make your essay even stronger.
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Angelina L.
4/14/2015 01:40:24 am
Vincent, though its true choclate milk is nutritous, as you explained there are many other ways of getting those nutrients. You might think chocolate milk has all the key nutients, but you can always get the same nutrients from chcolate milk without all the added sugar.
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Makayah K
4/14/2015 01:42:44 am
Vincent, some people like you, think that chocolate milk doesn't have a lot of sugar because it has less sugar than sports drinks and soda and I agree. However chocolate milk can have up to 30 grams of sugar in it. That is less than sports drinks and soda but it still has a lot of sugar and that sugar has no nutritional value.
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Aaron B.
4/2/2015 01:50:16 am
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:45:49 pm
Solid start, Aaron. You really have packed this full with information. Consider adding some counterclaims that will make your reader rethink what they already know about chocolate milk.
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Dawson
4/14/2015 12:41:05 am
Aaron, I love the choclaty flavor of choclate milk but, in choclate milk has high levels of carbohidrates and saturated fat. In the long term having high levels of saturated fat or carbohidrates can lead to heart cancers and heart diseaze!
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Aiden j
1/18/2017 08:19:03 am
So what it's milk and many people love it let's just forget everything and just drink it
Grace R.
4/2/2015 01:51:06 am
Just imagine the creamy, smooth, and chocolaty, taste that chocolate milk. That’s why I think chocolate milk should be served in schools because it’s healthy for your body, its tasty and good, and better than drinking sports drinks and soda.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:44:36 pm
Great start, Grace. By adding even more research to your essay your reader will be more convinced to serve chocolate milk.
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Rylee J
4/2/2015 01:51:18 am
I think chocolate milk should be served in schools because it is healthy for you and kids would choose to have chocolate milk over soda or other sugary drinks. The reason I do think chocolate milk should be served in school is because I believe that kids like it more than soda and white milk even though white milk is good for you as well.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:43:36 pm
You have great start to your essay, but where are the other reasons and your conclusion?
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Theo S
4/14/2015 01:52:23 am
Some people think chocolate milk is healthy because it has good nutrition, they might be correct but chocolate milk can have up to 30gms of sugar this shows even though it has some nutrition it has lots of sugar.
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Ryan K.
4/2/2015 02:30:26 am
Imagine you’re in a cafeteria and you look down at the freezer and all you see is white milk. It’s like they’re forcing you to drink white milk, and you would rather have a dry tongue than drink white milk. Well, I believe chocolate milk should be served in schools because kids won’t drink any milk if chocolate milk is removed, chocolate milk is healthy, and chocolate milk is better for you compared to other popular drinks.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:42:56 pm
Wow! You have a great format that is easy to follow. Consider adding in some counterclaims that will make your reader rethink what they know about chocolate milk.
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Aiden P
4/14/2015 12:37:47 am
Hey Ryan! I think this was a great essay, but I noticed you thought that kids would quit drinking anything from schools if chocolate milk was removed, and may instead bring more unhealthy options from home. I disagree with this. If kids decide that they would not want to drink milks at schools anymore, then what they drink would be the parents' decisions, and they would want to choose the healthiest drink for their kids anyways, unlike soda or sports drinks. Also, most parents don't want their kids to drink chocolate milk, but then kids sneak it in at schools anyways, so it might reassure parents more if we took it out of schools.
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Marshawn
4/14/2015 02:37:55 am
There has been a lot of controversy between chocolate milk whether it should be served in schools or shouldn’t be served in schools. I think that chocolate milk shouldn’t be served in schools because researcher Katie Couric, said most kids would drink any milk only if it was chocolate milk. This proves chocolate milk has some addicting ingredients inside of it. One debate about chocolate milk is that it can cause obesity because of the saturated fat and high cholesterol. The American Heart Association recommends a limit of no more than three sugary drinks per week because it can cause child obesity. Both chocolate milk and white milk contain calcium, vitamin D, riboflavin, phosphorus, protein, potassium, vitamin A, vitamin B12 and niacin. But the flavoring, which blends cocoa and sugar, adds calories. On average, there’s a 60- calorie difference between 1 percent white milk and 1 percent chocolate milk, Sills said.
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Reed N
4/2/2015 02:31:01 am
Chocolate milk is delicious and should be served in school. There are a lot of reasons why chocolate milk is good for you .I think chocolate milk should be served in school because it is healthy and because it gives kids the energy they need to do good at school.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:26:28 pm
WOW, Reed! You have a SOLID start to your essay and you really understand how a research essay tends to go. Consider adding even more evidence to make your argument more convincing.
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Maddie K
4/2/2015 02:41:49 am
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:25:18 pm
WOWZA! You have a very persuasive tone and evidence. Consider trying to connect to your reader by adding short, personal narratives.
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Audrey F
4/2/2015 02:42:15 am
My parents always used to give me white milk with breakfast, lunch, and dinner every day. I needed a change. I begged my mom and dad to bring home a gallon of chocolate milk and they finally did. When I saw the creamy, chocolate liquid sitting in the refrigerator, I was the happiest girl alive! This feeling of happiness made me think that chocolate milk should be served in school too because kids love the taste of it, it is better for your body than any other sugary drink, and it is healthy. Please schools, bring the same joy to your students as my parents brought home for me!
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:23:29 pm
Your creative writing is brought out by your word choice. Consider revising your language to make sure your FACTS shine rather then the descriptions. We want our readers to easily understand new information about chocolate milk.
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Brynn B.
4/2/2015 02:45:16 am
Have you ever seen someone who did not know what milk to choose? Well I have an answer. Chocolate Milk! Here’s why, it’s healthy, it’s good for a kid’s diet, and kids drink more milk when it’s flavored. So tell them chocolate milk!
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:20:52 pm
You have three great reasons why chocolate milk should be served in schools, but you can make your argument even more convincing by adding research to support your opinion.
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Sophia S
4/14/2015 02:40:39 am
you might think chocolate milk is good for u but when u look at the facts and has 20 or 20 grams of sugar and if u have to much chocolate milk it an give u cancer or obescity
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Dimitri Z
4/2/2015 02:49:20 am
Chocolate Milk versus White milk in schools
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:19:25 pm
You have clearly done your research! Amazing work! Consider adding some counterclaims in your essay to make it even more powerful.
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Marshawn
4/14/2015 02:38:58 am
There has been a lot of controversy between chocolate milk whether it should be served in schools or shouldn’t be served in schools. I think that chocolate milk shouldn’t be served in schools because researcher Katie Couric, said most kids would drink any milk only if it was chocolate milk. This proves chocolate milk has some addicting ingredients inside of it. One debate about chocolate milk is that it can cause obesity because of the saturated fat and high cholesterol. The American Heart Association recommends a limit of no more than three sugary drinks per week because it can cause child obesity. Both chocolate milk and white milk contain calcium, vitamin D, riboflavin, phosphorus, protein, potassium, vitamin A, vitamin B12 and niacin. But the flavoring, which blends cocoa and sugar, adds calories. On average, there’s a 60- calorie difference between 1 percent white milk and 1 percent chocolate milk, Sills said
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Alec b
4/2/2015 02:49:50 am
What would you do if you walked into your school or your refrigerator and there was no chocolate milk. Some people think chocolate milk should be banned in school and I think that chocolate milk shouldn’t be banned in schools because there is less sugar than other drinks, some kids wouldn’t drink milk at all, and it is healthy for kids.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:18:07 pm
Solid start, Alec! You really understand how an essay tends to go. Considering looking for even more research that will make your essay even more convincing.
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Monserrat P
4/2/2015 02:51:45 am
Discover the goods chocolate milk has for your body. I think chocolate milk should be served in schools because it’s a healthy part of a young person’s diet, its better compared to other sugary beverages, and kids like the taste of chocolate milk.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:16:59 pm
WOWZA! Amazing essay! You have packed this full with information and your counterclaims are convincing! Consider doing a bit of research on the human body to try and connect specifically with your readers.
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Josh H.
4/2/2015 02:53:08 am
Chocolate milk should be served in schools because it can make your taste buds burst into happiness. They are making healthier versions of it, part of a healthy diet, and it is healthy for you. Chocolate milk is good for you and can make you smile every day. Read on to know about the healthy stuff in chocolate milk.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:06:34 pm
WOW Josh, you really understand the format of an essay. Consider adding some counterclaims to make your essay even stronger. You might consider researching how milk improved your body's functions.
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Airyona A
4/10/2015 10:34:19 am
How would you feel if you came to school and all the chocolate milk, some people think that chocolate milk should be sold in schools because kids like the regular chocolate milk, kids love the taste, and it’s healthy.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:05:06 pm
Great start! Adding even more information about WHY chocolate milk should be drank by students and some specific EXAMPLES might make your essay more convincing.
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Jenna
4/14/2015 12:47:58 am
You may think that chocolate milk has vitamins and calories, but chocolate milk can lead to obesity, cancer, chronic disease, and heart disease. This is important because it can lead to a bad start in life very early on.
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Alexandria Hall
4/14/2015 01:50:17 am
airyona it's easy to think that choclate milk is healthy but it has a lot of sugar
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Sarah W
4/12/2015 03:57:19 am
Yum! You just remember that creamy, chocolaty taste of chocolate milk. Chocolate milk is actually healthy believe it or not. It has the essential nutrients, it encourages kids to drink dairy, and it’s a lot better than sugary sports drinks and hyped up soda. These are the reasons why chocolate mild should be served and schools.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:03:31 pm
Sara, your tone is very persuasive! Consider adding a counterclaim to make your essay even more powerful.
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Kenzie
4/14/2015 12:40:53 am
Sarah, can see why you think chocolate milk should be served in schools because chocolate milk gives us the nutrients we need. But I have to challenge this. I dont think that chocolate milk gives you all the nutrients we need. But white milk does. Chocolate milk, has about 18 grams less sugar than chocolate, which means there is more sugar than nutrients in chocolate milk.
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katie m
4/14/2015 02:42:32 am
its easy to think that there is only a little bit of sugar in chocolate milk but if u look at the facts theres alot infact there is about 30grams of sugar and about up to 170 calories this proves that theres alot of sugar in chocolate milk.
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Abby A.
4/12/2015 11:29:02 am
Imagine yourself in the lunchroom going to get a drink and the only thing that is there is chocolate milk. What would you rather do, have no milk at all or drink the chocolate milk? I think chocolate milk should be served in schools because it is nutritious, kids drink more milk when it is flavored and it is healthier than other beverages.
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:02:17 pm
WOW! You really understand the format of an argument essay. Consider making it "personal" to your reader to help them engage in the information.
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Matthew E.
4/13/2015 02:40:44 am
Imagine yourself in the lunch line. Everyone is drinking the SAME thing! Sounds boring, right? Chocolate milk can help! The ongoing debate about chocolate milk is very strong. I think chocolate milk should be sold in schools because it is healthy, it is better than no milk at all, and it is popular in schools. Remember to drink your milk!
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Anna Mack
4/13/2015 12:01:15 pm
Great start, Matthew. Consider adding additional research and explaining to your reader what you mean with your current evidence. It would help them be more convinced!
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Aiden N.
4/14/2015 12:35:30 am
Matthew.You might think that chocolate milk it healthy because it has the vitamins and nutrients you need, however chocolate milk can have up to thirty grams of sugar, also the whole school year all that sugar from chocolate milk can overflow a whole bus. this proves that chocolate milk is simply unhealthy for you.
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John H
4/14/2015 01:51:05 am
Matthew. People may think chocolate milk is healthy, but if you look at the facts one gram of carbohydrates would equal 4 calories. So imagine how many calories would be in chocolate milk just from the carbohydrates.
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Marshawn
4/14/2015 02:47:13 am
Matthew im sorry but Sadly, chocolate packs a lot of calories. Just 100g contains: Milk chocolate 520 kcals, dark chocolate 510 kcals and white chocolate 529 kcals. It does provide useful amounts of micronutrients, however. For example, 100g dark chocolate contains: 33mg calcium (compared with 220mg for milk chocolate), 89mg magnesium, 2.3mg iron, 0.7mg copper, 4mcg selenium and 1.4mg vitamin E.
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JJ
4/14/2015 01:38:01 am
Imagine you are at school and it is time for lunch and there is no chocolate milk why is there no chocolate milk I think chocolate milk should be served in school because it is healthy, it tastes good, and it is healthier than other drinks.
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Hunter D McNulty
4/14/2015 01:50:01 am
JJ look you think chocolate milk helps you but it has lots of added sugar and calories apart from the nutrition. This proves chocolate milk barely helps you. Also kids can get the same nutrition other better ways.
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Justin
4/14/2015 01:41:29 am
Some people think that chocolate milk should be removed from school menus because they feel it is a poor choice for students to get your daily nutrition needs. This is not right because chocolate milk contains healthy vitamins and calcium. I feel that chocolate milk should stay in schools because it is healthy drink that carries 9 essential nutrients, has a delicious taste, and is the most popular milk option selected by students. My reasons for having chocolate milk in schools are explained more below.
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Trent T.
4/14/2015 02:36:16 am
Some people think chocolate milk bad for you and it shouldn't be served in schools. Well I think they are wrong and chocolate milk should be served in schools because its nutritious, kids drink more milk when it’s flavored, and it’s a lot healthier than other drinks.
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elijah e
4/17/2015 02:27:01 am
Imagine walking into a cafeteria and the only thing you smell and see is chocolate milk. The only thing you will be able to drink is chocolate milk and you will feel its soothing chocolate taste. But you can’t forget about the vitamin a d and c in that awesome chocolate milk. There is some calcium in chocolate milk for your kinds. It is healthy for you and you and your family.
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kacy pidich
3/13/2016 04:05:28 pm
I have to do a 5th grade essay on I think chocolate milk should be served in school but I have to do it in 2 days so this is going to be hard what do I do
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Caresse
11/29/2016 09:11:00 pm
I have to do a 5th grade essay on why cm should be served at school and im finding reasons and evidence
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namd
3/7/2017 07:38:48 am
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zoey
12/22/2016 09:00:09 am
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12/4/2017 02:45:11 pm
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Arianna
2/2/2017 11:23:31 am
This was good but you need a lot of details sorry 😐.
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Isabelle
2/27/2017 10:01:44 am
I love chocolate milk!
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name
3/7/2017 07:37:48 am
i love chocolate milk
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Unknown
3/17/2017 10:47:21 am
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4/3/2017 08:45:09 am
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4/3/2017 08:47:53 am
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4/4/2017 09:00:30 am
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jeff
1/23/2018 12:06:16 pm
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5/10/2017 11:05:53 am
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11/7/2017 08:27:59 am
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juliy
11/13/2017 08:39:20 am
you people are weird
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ivan
4/12/2018 11:33:40 am
suck it
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___
12/4/2017 02:43:35 pm
Chocolate milk is much better that regular milk.
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not telling
11/26/2018 06:35:23 am
to long
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dustin
3/11/2019 12:35:13 pm
yolo every one
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Hank
4/24/2019 07:28:35 am
sup
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gavin
4/24/2019 07:36:41 am
sup dude you got a great report
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simon
12/12/2019 09:37:55 am
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simon
12/12/2019 09:40:40 am
But srusly guys this is stupid if we want to drink choco milk let us and if we dont we just dont get it from the cafateria
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anonomous
1/27/2020 12:41:05 am
i do not agreee
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Hello
3/4/2020 05:08:31 pm
Most kids in our school like chocolate milk better than white milk. When I look around at lunch on Wednesdays, lots of kids have a carton of chocolate milk on their table. Have you ever wanted to enjoy a refreshing drink with lots of minerals and protein that’s not white milk? Well, chocolate milk is the perfect solution, that's why chocolate milk should be able to stay in our school.
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layla
4/5/2020 05:51:44 pm
rhats mean
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nygirl
1/7/2021 07:57:03 am
hi I love your reasons why chocolate milk should still be serverd
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